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    My poem for School

    Journey to a Black Hole


    I was walking across the stars
    When I came across the strange planet of mars
    Whose little people fed me little bars
    So that I could truly see the beautiful stars

    The light was so bright, so bright
    That it made my eyes so tight, so tight
    As I stood there with a look of fright
    All of the little people began to fight

    I saw an aimed gun, so I decided to run
    But all of a sudden, I was part of the sun
    Thinking to myself, this is so much fun
    Until I saw the red and blue lights, then my journey was done.

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    Hahahhaa its good I guess, I don't know how to critique poetry

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    Quote Originally Posted by araminside
    Journey to a Black Hole


    I was walking across the stars
    When I came across the strange planet of mars
    Whose little people fed me little bars
    So that I could truly see the beautiful stars

    The light was so bright, so bright
    That it made my eyes so tight, so tight
    As I stood there with a look of fright
    All of the little people began to fight

    I saw an aimed gun, so I decided to run
    But all of a sudden, I was part of the sun
    Thinking to myself, this is so much fun
    Until I saw the red and blue lights, then my journey was done.


    And this is the way your last acid trip ended up ?

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    you got it

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    lol

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    Trippy
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    Put that to music and you have a Pink Floyd song!

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    Pretty good man

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    well it s official - u will flunk

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    Are you at least good at math?

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    ...and they say the arts are dead.

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    im a god **** **** genius in everything except math english history science and literature

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    Quote Originally Posted by araminside
    im a god **** **** genius in everything except math english history science and literature

    Sounds like you have phys ed down pat!

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    i change my vote... no literature lounge for AR

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    Lame.

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