Need help with lyrics for my band

[unclemoney]

Well I'm the lead singer in a metal band and I'm trying to come up with some new idea's for songs. Tell me what you guys think of this so far, and stuff I could add or edit/change.

"I'm coming to realization with reality
nobody, no one, not even god can stop me
It's not like i chose to be this way
but the demons won't go away
they're one in my soul but even now it's not whole


I search for answers in mutliple places
But all I come up with is blank stares and pale faces
it's time to chose my own destination
one question always haunts my mind, it brings me frustration.
perfect example, mankind, a ****ed up civilization.
human beings, the whole godly creation
**** everyone in this population, modern generations, there's no real motivation,
only a realization into one's ****ed up expectations, the devil is the only true inspiration

Time to kick back and smoke a bowl
rejoice to the end of my mortal soul
only then can one truely be whole
that's right, condem your own soul.

So the lesson here is easily learned
live for yourself as you notice the tables have turned
Turn mortal men into GODS
greatly outnumbered, embrace the devils odds

we will rise to the top of this pathetic life
With me as the ruler, there will be no strife.

Jesus, God, and the bible, all just a fling
Believe in me, for I'm the true king.

i bring happiness with blackness
putting an end to this chaotic mess
but how dare you be in distress
I have but one rule, to live in pure excess
Do you have the skills that I possess
I believe you have problems you need to address.

I'm putting an end to the life that you know
the true darkness of my upcoming will show
as we all suffer here in the land of tribulations
you'll watch the world undergo a transformation
no i'm not talking about the revelations
haha, pathetic fools, your souls now have new occupations
for I am the devils incarnation"

[unclemoney]

Think I should change some words around??? I also need to think of a good name for this song...

Another thing is, I wish you guys could invision this song like I can, the vocal's in this song are going to be nuts, I've already showed the band and they've got down how the lyrics sound so there coming up with sick shit that'll fit in perfectly.

Can't wait till it's all done i'll put it up here once we record it.

[unclemoney]

I believe a good name for this song would be

"the devils incarnation"

[dwaynewade]

maybe less is more... i'd simplify and shorten, and repeat chorus more often


don't know your rythm or timing for your words so is tough to say what i like-

[unclemoney]

maybe less is more... i'd simplify and shorten, and repeat chorus more often


don't know your rythm or timing for your words so is tough to say what i like-

It sounds like a lot but were speed metal, so it's really not that much at all.

[unclemoney]

Went over it with my friend, shit is ****ing sweet I'll post it up here once we record it.

[Panzerfaust]

Name of song:

"I hate everything (Shitty Childhood)"

[unclemoney]

Name of song:

"I hate everything (Shitty Childhood)"

rofl... Either a. your making fun, or b. that's the funniest name for a band//song

[Panzerfaust]

Since it is typical negative metal lyrics. I thought I gave you a pretty good title. Here are some more:

Had a shit childhood (Want everyone to know)

Hate

Condemnation

Damn it Unbound

Dark Deprevity

[unclemoney]

Since it is typical negative metal lyrics. I thought I gave you a pretty good title. Here are some more:

Had a shit childhood (Want everyone to know)

Hate

Condemnation

Damn it Unbound

Dark Deprevity

ahahaha bro, in no way would I ever name anything that... I don't hate anything or never had a shitty anything... lol. Besides I'll post up some of our other songs, there's plenty that are just normal lyrics you'd hear in just about any song.

[gya321]

Name of song:

"I hate everything (Shitty Childhood)"

Hahahaha

[gya321]

I do like some of the lyrics though