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06-11-2023, 07:51 AM #1
Poems for the Summer months
An Amputee
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Some things you don't get over --
they're more like an amputation
you learn to live with
And so now in the month of April
I'm prepping you for theatre
But I don't believe in anaesthetic
-- I need you to feel this
as I remove myself from your life
It won't be a shock when I leave
-- I've been on a collision course
for years and years
And although from time to time
there may have been glimmers of hope
-- all that singing and dancing you saw
was how I eloquently circled the drain
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06-11-2023, 04:45 PM #2
As usual, very out of place for this location, but props to you for maintaining your relentless & persistent bizarre consistency.
Likewise per your manner, a tad dark and somewhat disturbing; again consistently bizarre.
That said, a clever, but regrettably tragic story.
May I add some questions and offer some critiques or suggestions? I thought it would be polite to ask prior.
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06-11-2023, 11:30 PM #3Senior Member
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I thought it was pretty good; although I am no authority on poetry.
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06-12-2023, 10:17 AM #4
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06-12-2023, 11:55 AM #5
My personal experience with amputees immediately reminded me of the pain remaining in the removed phantom limb. It was a lingering thought that affected me and stuck with me as I read the story.
I was confused about the usage of the drain at the end. Was that circling a gradual departure by yourself?
I’m not generally a poetry lover/reader myself, but thought this story was very intriguing. And of course I also appreciate an intelligent and clever usage of darkness to tell a story. Maybe I’m going to have to read some Poe after my next round of books.
What is the book’s theme, is there one?
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06-13-2023, 11:32 AM #6
I took part in a poetry workshop for a regional initiative to promote the arts. There isn't just one theme, a few people wrote various poems.
When something shit happens in a person's life, they try to take the good from it, they try to find the silver lining, they try to find the beauty in their loss, and they try to move forward with a new purpose.
An amputation leaves you with a deficit. Having two arms is better than having one arm. Having two legs is better than having one leg. You won't be able to come up with some beautiful reason why you're better off with just one hand instead of two.
Dealing with an amputation comes down to stopping analysing your situation, stopping hypothesizing on how it could be better. With an amputation, you just gotta say, it is what it is and I am where I am.
Some things in life you don't bounce back from. You don't get over them, you just learn to live with them. Some people lean on a religious faith -- I met one guy whose 8yr old daughter was kidnapped, raped and murdered, and he survives on his Christian faith, paying regular visits to churches around Ireland to share his testimony.
As I mentioned before on this forum, and as you pointed out was repeated in a Hollywood movie: There are the unpleasantries in life that hurt you, and there are the unpleasantries in life that change you.
That last stanza in my poem is about how a person who's on a collision course with death can seem to be doing really well toward the end, right before they check out. By 'circling the drain', I meant the process of unravelling that takes place as a person approaches their suicide.
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06-13-2023, 02:06 PM #7
I started a thread last year about meeting an older woman working out in the gym with prosthetics on both amputated legs and another on her amputated arm.
I saw in Ukraine, soldiers post pictures of themselves in artistic fashion to make a statement.
Bottom line is you got to have admirable strength.
Really great poem FK and really interesting way to describe an inevitable suicide.
Edit: I recall this pic from a recent article in our paper. Tragic, yet artistic; the “beauty” in something horrific . . .Last edited by wango; 06-13-2023 at 02:15 PM.
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06-13-2023, 03:45 PM #8
I'm actually glad you touched on this particular matter.
I think I'm probably lying to myself a little about the 'inevitably' of the suicide that took place in my life. Was she on a collision course for years before I met her? Yes she was. And was it probable that she would eventually kill herself? Yes it was. But I don't believe that anyone is an inevitable suicide, not even the guys in psychiatric units who've hacked themselves up a few times.
I do think that some people are so messed up that they need to be physically removed from their situation, get away from their family, get away from their neighbourhood, get away from their community, to go somewhere for residential care -- whether it's to a temple, or a rehab, or a psychiatric unit. I do think that anyone's internal emotion state, their outlook on life and their life circumstances can change in such a way that they desire to live on, irrespective of what's happened in the past.
I've mentioned before that I do a 10-day silent meditation course each year........ there's a good video about it up on YouTube where they ran the meditation course in a prison in Alabama........ definitely worth 72mins of your time:
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06-21-2023, 06:40 AM #9
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06-21-2023, 02:28 PM #10
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06-23-2023, 06:36 AM #11
Invictus
BY WILLIAM ERNEST HENLEY
Out of the night that covers me,
Black as the pit from pole to pole,
I thank whatever gods may be
For my unconquerable soul.
In the fell clutch of circumstance
I have not winced nor cried aloud.
Under the bludgeonings of chance
My head is bloody, but unbowed.
Beyond this place of wrath and tears
Looms but the Horror of the shade,
And yet the menace of the years
Finds and shall find me unafraid.
It matters not how strait the gate,
How charged with punishments the scroll,
I am the master of my fate,
I am the captain of my soul.
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06-23-2023, 09:21 AM #12
roses are red,
vilolets are blue,
kimbo and fluid suck,
and prox and wango too....
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06-23-2023, 09:26 AM #13
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06-23-2023, 10:11 AM #14
Lay off too much weed
play pickle ball instead
becuz the weed
it be messing with yo head.Last edited by wango; 06-23-2023 at 10:14 AM.
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06-23-2023, 02:49 PM #15
I have an idea for a group activity.
I could choose a cartel video off a gore website, and share it here. Then we write poems lamenting the suffering depicted in the video.
Maybe ' ghost face' would be suitable? That's the one where they burn the guy's face off but keep him alive for a while without a face.
Unless somebody else can suggest some other video?
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06-23-2023, 04:15 PM #16
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06-23-2023, 05:18 PM #17
Not a fan of belittling/minimizing someone’s suffering. Particularly from those f’n animals. Many years back at a previous gym I would see a young man that was severely burnt, his arms were badly scarred and he had only a remnants of a face. I thought - what guts to get out there & at a gym that is all about physical perfection.
But here ya go as I’m in a poetry mood today . . . Dedicated to that kid who I never really met nor knew how to approach to applaud him.
A man without a face.
But still a man. Perhaps a better one?
The flames might have robbed your superficial beauty.
But . . .
The beauty that glows from your strength & courage is radiant.
Yes, definitely a better man.
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06-24-2023, 03:24 AM #18
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06-24-2023, 07:23 AM #19
I think you should go visit that tribe and speak your poetry to them you know get to know them and report back to steroid dot com forum
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06-24-2023, 11:31 AM #20
I shall draw from my creativity and utilise my poetic license to write a poem about you in the role of a cartel victim.
Stationary Trucks
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Ain't no trucks in these parts no more
Alabama's roads done closed forever more
One fine man moving containers from port to base,
no one would have imagined he'd end up without a face
Cartel done nabbed him on Alabama's windy roads,
customers be complaining they never received their loads
Once transporting containers full of car rentals,
not so frequently anymore since they made a dog eat his genitals
The beat, beat, beat of the heart in his chest
-- life so precious, so why choose a child to molest?
Dodging the cartels is easier than pie,
unless you make yourself a target. . .
trucking children from kindergarten to the paedophiles to die
Ain't no trucks in these parts no more
Cuz done left the reservation,
and done widowed a whore
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06-24-2023, 12:43 PM #21
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06-24-2023, 01:59 PM #22
If kimbo is heading to the US why dont you 2 meet up and settle this like men, mano a mano. Kimbos boxing vs Cuz's raw strength. Loser leaves steroid .com forever
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06-24-2023, 02:13 PM #23
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06-24-2023, 02:23 PM #24
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06-24-2023, 04:20 PM #25
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06-24-2023, 04:49 PM #26
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06-25-2023, 09:40 AM #27
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06-25-2023, 10:09 AM #28
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06-25-2023, 10:44 AM #29
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06-26-2023, 07:48 AM #30
cuz you cannot box Kimbo. as we all know he is a well trained fighter who has been training for a fight.
that and all the gear he runs, I mean shit, his PR would have any child scared.....
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06-26-2023, 11:20 AM #31
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06-28-2023, 07:56 AM #32
Guys if you're not going to embed your messages inside poems then please find another thread.
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07-07-2023, 10:44 AM #33
The ending of one of JFK’s favorite poems . . . .
But I’ve a rendezvous with Death
At midnight in some flaming town,
When Spring trips north again this year,
And I to my pledged word am true,
I shall not fail that rendezvous.
As he knew he was hated by many in politics & definitely by the CIA, he would make light of being shot when it was brought up. However, not so with more private conversations.
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07-07-2023, 01:44 PM #34
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07-07-2023, 01:45 PM #35
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07-07-2023, 02:01 PM #36
Though not a poem, in keeping with my JFK theme, a couple of quotes from LBJ.
1960: When asked if he would accept the vice president’s position - “Hand on heart, I wouldn’t be on JFK’s team if he got down on his knees”
After the inauguration: When teased and asked about accepting - “One out of four presidents has died in office. I’m a gambling man darlin, and this is the only chance I got”.
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07-07-2023, 02:13 PM #37
I guess this qualifies since it's summer. Right @ 90°F almost 100°F w/ humidity factored in. It's a little lower humidity today.
I heard this one a couple of years ago. It kind of made sense/stuck with me so I came home and looked it up and printed it out before I forgot too much.
Can you hear the curse of death?
As a dying rainbow confronts the black cloud ahead.
The whistle of the wind defines the moment instead;
as death begins swallowing up the dead.
Break for the hills,
run to the valleys,
climb the mountain that will kill your suffering breath.
Remember when life was good in your youth?
Before your bones began to fail with all the abuse.
Time has halted;
your muscles have revolted.
The mind shuts down while your memories defaulted.
You, my friend, are at an end –
for the rainbow you see is only pretend.
Ok. That's all I got. The Beavis and Butthead coffee shop episode is much more entertaining.
Edit: Correction. Mrs AG informed that I was in error. Current heat index = 106°F.Last edited by almostgone; 07-07-2023 at 02:25 PM.
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07-07-2023, 04:02 PM #40There are 3 loves in my life: my wife, my English mastiffs, and my weightlifting....Man, my wife gets really pissed when I get the 3 confused...
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