Could you guys critique....

**Tyson2481** · 04-05-2006, 05:15 PM

my cousins myspace....he is a quadriplegic, and he has taken up rappin...peep his jams and let me know what u guys think.....thanks

http://www.myspace.com/montana505

this is serious guys just so u know....thanks

***D7M*** · 04-05-2006, 05:22 PM

I only listened to "let's get away", imho the chorus was too long, not enough lyrics---they were decent tho.

did he do the beats, too, I liked the beat.

**C_Bino** · 04-05-2006, 05:26 PM

IIts alright. My constructive criticism is that he doesnt have that "hit" sound. I mean I can listen to the song and not remember a single lyric, whereas if I listen to 50 or Biggie etc you know the song is gonna be stuck in my head and I will be singin those few lines that stick with you in my head. These songs are the type of songs I listen to and Im like ya not bad, but wouldnt remember the artist or song title. Does anyone get what Im trying to say? Im not trying to be an asshole, but he just doesnt have that BAM that you need to get into the game.

**Tyson2481** · 04-05-2006, 05:30 PM

nah hell ya i respect yalls opinions...his producer does his beat....the song on there called morena is better than lets get away in my opinion....thanks dudes...keep em coming

**needmorestrength** · 04-05-2006, 05:34 PM

sounds about as good as stuff I hear on the radio. Props

***D7M*** · 04-05-2006, 06:07 PM

yah, yah, good call CBino, I know what you're saying.

**BlueAndromeda73** · 04-05-2006, 06:24 PM

How long has he been doin this I thought he sounded pretty good but like some of the other guys said not really a beat to get stuck in your head but def heading in the right direction I liked it

**TheMudMan** · 04-05-2006, 06:57 PM

Work it in work it and Morena I actually thought were good........... I don't even listen or like this type of music I'm into hard core metal...... so for me to even listen to it says something about his work.

I wish your cousin good luck with this.

**Tyson2481** · 04-05-2006, 08:27 PM

thanks guys for all your honest opinions...

***Narkissos*** · 04-05-2006, 08:56 PM

He has talent...

I didn't feel "let's get away"

"Que Bonita" has some potential.

The guitar work is nice.. Some of the rhymes are too cliche...I was listening for the first time and i was anticipating what would come next...

His breathing needs a lil work. Sounds at some parts like he's rushed for breath

"Work it in Work it out" similar criticism: lyrics in parts; breathing.. plus the beat sounds like another song that i can't place. More can be done with the beat. Overall it was cool tho. Better than some of the shit that hits the airwaves and makes it big.

"Morena" i like..

It isn't just a bunch of guys rapping on a dead beat like some mainstream rap/hiphop i hear. I like the harpsichord-sounding keyboard use.. and the drum partial solo during the pause in the song.

I wish your cuz all the luck in the world man

~Nark